Genieve-Task2-Good-work!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Some people believe that employees should stay in the same job for the rest of their lives. Others think they should switch jobs at least once during their career. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People have different views about whether workers must remain in the same job or switch work. In my opinion, I believe that changing jobs can be beneficial to an employee. This essay will discuss about people who change their jobs to gain experience and an opportunity to a higher salary as an example to demonstrate points and prove arguments.

There are benefits of not staying in the same job. People often change jobs in order to further their career and learn different skills. This is because people who change their job need to develop a range of experience and skills. For example, in a fast-changing world workers need to be flexible. A qualification necessary today may not be required tomorrow and vice versa. Therefore, an individual must hone his abilities by engaging in his chosen career by means of trainings and other forms of enhancement.

Furthermore, changing jobs allow workers to search for a greener pasture. Oftentimes, working up to higher pay and benefits within a company can take many years, while switching jobs workers earn a significant increase in pay and benefits. For instance, a survey reported that professionals who changed their jobs at least once in their lives are more confident and financially secure than their counterparts, and a salary structure gets a hike of at least 20% in almost all the cases. As a result, employees tend to seek for another company who offer a promotion or a higher salary.

In conclusion, as an employee changing jobs is a career advancement and at the same time a sense of fulfillment in terms of financial matters. It is predicted that in the future more workers would choose not to remain in their job for more than five years.

Task 1

The graph shows the figures in thousand for fatalities of bird flu by the World Health Organization worldwide from 1990 to 2000.

Overall, it is clear from the graph that the total number of cases of bird flu increases globally each year over a period of 10 years. It is also noticeably highest in 1997.

The first four years in the graph follows the same pattern. In 1990, bird flu incidences was at 123,000 thousand approximately and remain the same in 1991. These figures rose to about 134,000 thousand in the next two years, 1992 and 1993.

In 1994, the cases of bird flu rose up at around 145,000 thousand and increases steadily until 1996 at 150,000 thousand. Bird flu cases reached its peak at 175,00 thousand in 1997 and it remained at a similar level until 2000, with a slight decline of 10,000 thousand bird flu incidence that occur in 1999.

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Genieve-Task2-Good-work!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Some people believe that employees should stay in the same job for the rest of their lives. Others think they should switch jobs at least once during their career. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People have different views about whether workers must remain in the same job or switch work. In my opinion, I believe that changing jobs can be beneficial to an employee. This essay will discuss about people who change their jobs to gain experience and an opportunity to a higher salary as an example to demonstrate points and prove arguments.

There are benefits of not staying in the same job. People often change jobs in order to further their career and learn different skills. This is because people who change their job need to develop a range of experience and skills. For example, in a fast-changing world workers need to be flexible. A qualification necessary today may not be required tomorrow and vice versa. Therefore, an individual must hone his abilities by engaging in his chosen career by means of trainings and other forms of enhancement.

Furthermore, changing jobs allow workers to search for a greener pasture. Oftentimes, working up to higher pay and benefits within a company can take many years, while switching jobs workers earn a significant increase in pay and benefits. For instance, a survey reported that professionals who changed their jobs at least once in their lives are more confident and financially secure than their counterparts, and a salary structure gets a hike of at least 20% in almost all the cases. As a result, employees tend to seek for another company who offer a promotion or a higher salary.

In conclusion, as an employee changing jobs is a career advancement and at the same time a sense of fulfillment in terms of financial matters. It is predicted that in the future more workers would choose not to remain in their job for more than five years.

Task 1

The graph shows the figures in thousand for fatalities of bird flu by the World Health Organization worldwide from 1990 to 2000.

Overall, it is clear from the graph that the total number of cases of bird flu increases globally each year over a period of 10 years. It is also noticeably highest in 1997.

The first four years in the graph follows the same pattern. In 1990, bird flu incidences was at 123,000 thousand approximately and remain the same in 1991. These figures rose to about 134,000 thousand in the next two years, 1992 and 1993.

In 1994, the cases of bird flu rose up at around 145,000 thousand and increases steadily until 1996 at 150,000 thousand. Bird flu cases reached its peak at 175,00 thousand in 1997 and it remained at a similar level until 2000, with a slight decline of 10,000 thousand bird flu incidence that occur in 1999.

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V-T1-Academic-Great-Work

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection The pie graph illustrates usage of the eight different programming languages.
The most used programming language is Java with 22.3% of total. C++ accounts for almost the same percantage, 22% and it is a second most used. Right behind is C with 20.7%, while PHP is far more behind with 16,3%. The remaining four languages (Perl,C&,JavaScript and Visual Basic) together make up roughly for one fifth of the total usage.
Graphicly, it is possible to divide the pie into 5 slices that make up each for around one fifth of the total usage. First slice is Java, then goes C++, C, PHP and the last slice is made of Perl, C&, JavaScript and Visual Basic accounting for 8, 4, 3,4 and 2,8 percent respectively.
Overall, it is clear from the graph that Java, C++ and C dominate among the selected programming languages, while Visual Basic, JavaScript and C& are the least used.

The bar graph describes birth and death rates in five Eastern European countries.
The highest birth rate per 1000 is in the Czech Republic, 11.1. Poland and Slovakia are just behind with 10.8 and 10.7, respectively. The least newborns are in Croatia at 9.5 per thousand and Hungary is somewhere in the middle with 9.9. Concerning death rates, Hungary has by far the highest, 13 and Croatia follows with 11.1. The Czech Republic and Poland are both at 10 per thousand and the lowest is in Slovakia, 9.4.
Comparing birth and death rates among countries in the chart it is clear that the population in Hungary and Croatia is decreasing considerably by each consecutive year, while the population in the Czech Republic, Poland and Slovakia is slowly growing.
Overall, it can be concluded that despite living in the same European region, selected countries have significantly different birth and deth rates.

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RAHUL-READING-ESSAY

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GON-INT-NAT-MKTG

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GON-INT-NAT-MKTG

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Sweety-IELTS-ESSAY

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Should humans adapt to technology or should technology adapt to us? Is technology making us intellectually weaker or more intelligent?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, everything in this world is run by high technology. Some people believe that the adaptation to technological sources should be from human or vice versa. Meanwhile, other inhabitants think that this could either make humans more brilliant or weakens the intellect of a person. In my opinion, I agree that modern technology should adapt to human and it negatively affects the cognitive skill of a person. This essay will discuss both views and demonstrate points to support arguments.
Firstly, modern technology should adapt to humans to provide comfort and improve their way of living. This is due to the fact that, dealing with what people usually do is more beneficial and practical. For instance, modern transportation such as airplanes and railways save time compared to pre- historic modes of transport . Hence, it is more logical to pacify the individual needs than adapting what technology has to offer.
Moreover, advance technology also has some drawbacks by becoming more dependent that weakens the brain capacity to think. This is because it opts human not to think for solutions and simply relying to open source. For example, automatic correction of misspelled word in composing essay. Therefore, people will be prone to errors when being asked to write in the absence of technology.
To sum it up, the advent of modern world of technology plays an essential part of our lives in a positive and negative manner. However, we should instill to our minds to make good use of what we can do and not what technology can do to us.

The bar graph illustrates the predicted number of visits in the following cities namely, London, Paris Madrid and Istanbul by country of origin, Mexico, Canada and U.S.A in the year 2018.
In Mexico, the most popular place to go will be in Madrid with more than 60,000 visits a year whereas, other remaining metropolis are its lower with only less than a quarter. Istanbul will have the highest number of visits coming from Canada having almost 3 quarters per year while, Madrid will have a quarter which is the least among the other cities.
Furthermore, in the United States of America, majority of the metropolitan area will have greater number of visits accounting to more than 50,000 tourists per annum. However, it is noticeable that city of Paris has a tremendous number of American visitors at 100,000 annually.
Overall, it is clear that each country have different preference of which city to travel for the year 2018 wherein Mexico prefers to visit Madrid, while Canadians go for the city of Istanbul and the USA to Paris.

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Sweety-IELTS-ESSAY

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Should humans adapt to technology or should technology adapt to us? Is technology making us intellectually weaker or more intelligent?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, everything in this world is run by high technology. Some people believe that the adaptation to technological sources should be from human or vice versa. Meanwhile, other inhabitants think that this could either make humans more brilliant or weakens the intellect of a person. In my opinion, I agree that modern technology should adapt to human and it negatively affects the cognitive skill of a person. This essay will discuss both views and demonstrate points to support arguments.
Firstly, modern technology should adapt to humans to provide comfort and improve their way of living. This is due to the fact that, dealing with what people usually do is more beneficial and practical. For instance, modern transportation such as airplanes and railways save time compared to pre- historic modes of transport . Hence, it is more logical to pacify the individual needs than adapting what technology has to offer.
Moreover, advance technology also has some drawbacks by becoming more dependent that weakens the brain capacity to think. This is because it opts human not to think for solutions and simply relying to open source. For example, automatic correction of misspelled word in composing essay. Therefore, people will be prone to errors when being asked to write in the absence of technology.
To sum it up, the advent of modern world of technology plays an essential part of our lives in a positive and negative manner. However, we should instill to our minds to make good use of what we can do and not what technology can do to us.

The bar graph illustrates the predicted number of visits in the following cities namely, London, Paris Madrid and Istanbul by country of origin, Mexico, Canada and U.S.A in the year 2018.
In Mexico, the most popular place to go will be in Madrid with more than 60,000 visits a year whereas, other remaining metropolis are its lower with only less than a quarter. Istanbul will have the highest number of visits coming from Canada having almost 3 quarters per year while, Madrid will have a quarter which is the least among the other cities.
Furthermore, in the United States of America, majority of the metropolitan area will have greater number of visits accounting to more than 50,000 tourists per annum. However, it is noticeable that city of Paris has a tremendous number of American visitors at 100,000 annually.
Overall, it is clear that each country have different preference of which city to travel for the year 2018 wherein Mexico prefers to visit Madrid, while Canadians go for the city of Istanbul and the USA to Paris.

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HANG-IELTS-STAR!-T2!!!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Communication is less between family members of late. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree?

Interpersonal communication in small imitate groups such as families is an effective way to enhance the relationship between family members, however, I have to admit that there is a decline of communication. Here are my points and examples to demonstrate what I said.
Addicted to the Internet, through devices such as mobile phones, tablets, and laptops, these become the first choice rather than face-to-face communication. Convenience as it is, adults are accustomed to keeping connection with others by their electronic devices. For example, the family gathering is less attractive than before, most of us make a priority to send a message or make telephone calls instead of having a traditional family gathering. Occupied with building relationship with others through their mobile phones, adults often ignore what the elder said during the dinner. Consequently, e-devices steal quality family time.
Additionally, more and more working parents spend the majority of their time on working in the office even working overtime at home. When parents want to obtain an advantageous position in the stiff competition, they have no choice but to devote themselves to work at the cost of communicating with their children. For instance, children are sent to boarding school and often only go home once a month. Therefore, less communication causes a sense of isolation between parents and children.
To conclude, Internet addiction and working pressure discourage us to communicate with each other. Considering a father or mother is an important role to play, workers are responsible for balance work and life for families and all of us will benefit from communication between family members.

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and imaginations than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

It is common that giving much more emphasis in reading rather than doing an enjoyable activity. I totally agree that an enjoyable activity prepares children to be a good member of a society. Here are the points to demonstrate what I said.

Reading has numerous benefits, but playing on game consoles can develop skills that could not be developed just by reading alone. This is because through playing on games consoles, children can develop spatial awareness, cognitive that impossible to develop just reading. For example, a recent study from Harvard suggests that students play 2 hours a week on consoles outperforms the ordinary by 20% in the psychometric task. Therefore, the advantages of playing on game consoles are clear and give an opportunity to a child to progress in the air rather than just reading.

Secondly, just reading may be stood at academic basis rather than the whole things. Because of physical activities, especially the sports, introduce new dynamics such as competition. Take for an example, introduces students to do some activities, like hiking or playing basketball can help them develop a good habit that will continue into their adulthood. Kobe, James and other NBA athletes all start their training from an early age. Therefore, it is necessary to give emphasis on physical education to explore student’s potential in some competitive fields.

To conclude, a balanced education system, need to incorporate various activities rather than just reading, which will benefit the lifestyle of young people. Consequently, it will promote students health and well-being and practice their skills in many aspects

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HANG-IELTS-STAR!-T2!!!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Communication is less between family members of late. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree?

Interpersonal communication in small imitate groups such as families is an effective way to enhance the relationship between family members, however, I have to admit that there is a decline of communication. Here are my points and examples to demonstrate what I said.
Addicted to the Internet, through devices such as mobile phones, tablets, and laptops, these become the first choice rather than face-to-face communication. Convenience as it is, adults are accustomed to keeping connection with others by their electronic devices. For example, the family gathering is less attractive than before, most of us make a priority to send a message or make telephone calls instead of having a traditional family gathering. Occupied with building relationship with others through their mobile phones, adults often ignore what the elder said during the dinner. Consequently, e-devices steal quality family time.
Additionally, more and more working parents spend the majority of their time on working in the office even working overtime at home. When parents want to obtain an advantageous position in the stiff competition, they have no choice but to devote themselves to work at the cost of communicating with their children. For instance, children are sent to boarding school and often only go home once a month. Therefore, less communication causes a sense of isolation between parents and children.
To conclude, Internet addiction and working pressure discourage us to communicate with each other. Considering a father or mother is an important role to play, workers are responsible for balance work and life for families and all of us will benefit from communication between family members.

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and imaginations than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

It is common that giving much more emphasis in reading rather than doing an enjoyable activity. I totally agree that an enjoyable activity prepares children to be a good member of a society. Here are the points to demonstrate what I said.

Reading has numerous benefits, but playing on game consoles can develop skills that could not be developed just by reading alone. This is because through playing on games consoles, children can develop spatial awareness, cognitive that impossible to develop just reading. For example, a recent study from Harvard suggests that students play 2 hours a week on consoles outperforms the ordinary by 20% in the psychometric task. Therefore, the advantages of playing on game consoles are clear and give an opportunity to a child to progress in the air rather than just reading.

Secondly, just reading may be stood at academic basis rather than the whole things. Because of physical activities, especially the sports, introduce new dynamics such as competition. Take for an example, introduces students to do some activities, like hiking or playing basketball can help them develop a good habit that will continue into their adulthood. Kobe, James and other NBA athletes all start their training from an early age. Therefore, it is necessary to give emphasis on physical education to explore student’s potential in some competitive fields.

To conclude, a balanced education system, need to incorporate various activities rather than just reading, which will benefit the lifestyle of young people. Consequently, it will promote students health and well-being and practice their skills in many aspects

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Valentina-IELTS-ESSAY-T1-STAR!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Local governments are pushing companies to move from large cities to regional locations.
What are the benefits and drawbacks of this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays many companies are pushed by local authorities to invest on regional areas rather than staying in the traditional large locations. In my view this change of trend could be beneficial for businesses with high demands, while it might lead to loss of quality for the others.

The main benefit of investing on regional locations is the represented by low costs. This is due to the fact that the land and its management are less expensive, as there is less competition for it, and to the cut on transportation of raw materials. This, for instance, would be an exceptionally good investment for those working with the so-called basic necessities, as they will never be short in demands. Therefore, local centres would assure a prompt and capillary distribution while maintaining quality.

The biggest drawback of peripheral areas instead is that it could not be as easy for customers to reach them. This is because it is unlikely and too expensive for regional locations to be as organised as a large city in terms of public transport. The companies involved in the production of extremely specialised goods, such as bike parts, sports clothes and training tools, would not experience any improvement by this change, for example. As a consequence, the push of governments to move to regional locations would lead to plummeting profits and, possibly, loss of quality.

In conclusion, I believe fostering the development of companies in regional locations is incredibly good for companies with a large market and a fairly constant demand. On the other hand, in my opinion the benefit of lower costs does not outweigh the negatives of peripheral areas for businesses working with highly specialised products.

The flowchart below presents the steps in producing tea.
Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates the steps that are necessary for the production of different teas.

The first step is common to white, green, oolong and black tea and it consists in the sorting and cleaning of leaves. Following this, white tea only requires steaming and drying, while the other varieties have longer paths: all three of them are withered and then given a series of specific treatments. These include fermentation, that is short for oolong and full for black tea, frying and drying.

With regards to scented teas instead, the pathway is considerably smooth. After choosing one variety among green, black and oolong tea and drying it, the main step consists in the addition of scents, that can be either flowers or fruit. Finally, the good is cooled.

Overall, the production of tea goes through some basic steps that are common to every variety, while some procedures are specific of some kinds.

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Sajani-IELTS-ESSAY

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection While lexical resources are thought to be the most important factor to have a grasp on what one reads, other educationalists think that creative skills like writing or speaking are crucial. There are valid arguments on both sides of this topic which I will discuss in my essay and will reach a reasoned conclusion.

According to some, vocabulary is the chief component which one must acquire in order to comprehend anything that is written on a paper. For instance, if someone wants to get to know about the current situation about the world by reading newspaper, he or she she ought to understand the meaning of certain specific words related to that current situation or even the weather condition. This in order to perceive the correct information about something one must know the proper meaning of that to avoid any kind of misunderstanding.

On the other hand, people holding different view, think that skills of writing and speaking should be given more importance rather than vocabulary acquisition to understand the read topic. They think, after having read something , talking about it or keeping a note on that topic will make the whole topic much more apprehensive to the reader. In addition, being able to discuss any subject that one have read, makes him more knowledgeable as well as more competent in that particular field.

To conclude, in my opinion I strongly believe that acquiring vocabularies, or any productive skills are equally important to have a strong grasp about any subject. These skills complement each other and can not be replaced.

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Francesca-IELTS-T2-Genius!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Traditional schooling is out of date, boring and stifles a child’s natural talents, various professionals have pushed for an education revolution. Are there alternatives in the education system? Is traditional education doing more harm than good?

Words: 258

The issue of whether traditional programme or teaching revolution benefits children’s talent is a question raised in recent years. This essay will illustrate different aspects of education, using examples from the school sector to support arguments.
Firstly, there is ample evidence to suggest that modern classes can be productive for different aspects. Nowadays, educators have introduced new courses such as theatre and music, in order to stimulate children’s mental ability and creativity. This is due to the fact that much importance has been given to pupils predilections. For instance, research conducted by the American Education Society has shown that students have improved their mathematical skills after taking one year of theatre classes. Therefore, to study theatre has been considered an important innovation.
Secondly, even if new curricula have shown their importance in enhancing student’s talent, it must not be forgotten that traditional lessons put the basis for an appropriate and comprehensive training. This is because traditional modules have built their focus on philosophical thinking development as well as the knowledge of human history. Hence, students are still required to learn about classic curricula in order to have a good understanding of life. For example, research conducted by Harvard University has shown that while the use of theatre classes can improve student’s mathematical skills, following History lessons could develop a deeper human rights consciousness.
To conclude, positive consequences can be derived from the use of original programmes such as theatre and music, yet it should not be forgotten that the traditional path could be important as well as innovations.
ACADEMIC TASK 1
Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie graph shows expenses from tree different regions in the UK for 2014.
In 2014, Yorkshire, Derbyshire and Lancashire have invested in different sectors. It can clearly be seen that the main percentage of expenditures was in Yorkshire and Lancashire with almost a third of their efforts in Education, whereas Derbyshire spent in it approximately a quarter. On the contrary, Derbyshire put the majority of its money in the Leisure sector. Another interesting data is related to Social Services, which is the lower investment in Derbyshire. Small investments were assigned to Environment, which is considered less important when confronted to other sectors, especially in Yorkshire. Community Care has the same expenditures in Yorkshire and Derbyshire, while is less considered in Lancashire.

Overall, each Region seems to have a tendency to one predominant sector, with Yorkshire and Lancashire with a preference for Education, and Derbyshire with a preference for Leisure.

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Francesca-IELTS-T2-Genius!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Traditional schooling is out of date, boring and stifles a child’s natural talents, various professionals have pushed for an education revolution. Are there alternatives in the education system? Is traditional education doing more harm than good?

Words: 258

The issue of whether traditional programme or teaching revolution benefits children’s talent is a question raised in recent years. This essay will illustrate different aspects of education, using examples from the school sector to support arguments.
Firstly, there is ample evidence to suggest that modern classes can be productive for different aspects. Nowadays, educators have introduced new courses such as theatre and music, in order to stimulate children’s mental ability and creativity. This is due to the fact that much importance has been given to pupils predilections. For instance, research conducted by the American Education Society has shown that students have improved their mathematical skills after taking one year of theatre classes. Therefore, to study theatre has been considered an important innovation.
Secondly, even if new curricula have shown their importance in enhancing student’s talent, it must not be forgotten that traditional lessons put the basis for an appropriate and comprehensive training. This is because traditional modules have built their focus on philosophical thinking development as well as the knowledge of human history. Hence, students are still required to learn about classic curricula in order to have a good understanding of life. For example, research conducted by Harvard University has shown that while the use of theatre classes can improve student’s mathematical skills, following History lessons could develop a deeper human rights consciousness.
To conclude, positive consequences can be derived from the use of original programmes such as theatre and music, yet it should not be forgotten that the traditional path could be important as well as innovations.
ACADEMIC TASK 1
Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie graph shows expenses from tree different regions in the UK for 2014.
In 2014, Yorkshire, Derbyshire and Lancashire have invested in different sectors. It can clearly be seen that the main percentage of expenditures was in Yorkshire and Lancashire with almost a third of their efforts in Education, whereas Derbyshire spent in it approximately a quarter. On the contrary, Derbyshire put the majority of its money in the Leisure sector. Another interesting data is related to Social Services, which is the lower investment in Derbyshire. Small investments were assigned to Environment, which is considered less important when confronted to other sectors, especially in Yorkshire. Community Care has the same expenditures in Yorkshire and Derbyshire, while is less considered in Lancashire.

Overall, each Region seems to have a tendency to one predominant sector, with Yorkshire and Lancashire with a preference for Education, and Derbyshire with a preference for Leisure.

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Francesca-IELTS-T2-Genius!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Traditional schooling is out of date, boring and stifles a child’s natural talents, various professionals have pushed for an education revolution. Are there alternatives in the education system? Is traditional education doing more harm than good?

Words: 258

The issue of whether traditional programme or teaching revolution benefits children’s talent is a question raised in recent years. This essay will illustrate different aspects of education, using examples from the school sector to support arguments.
Firstly, there is ample evidence to suggest that modern classes can be productive for different aspects. Nowadays, educators have introduced new courses such as theatre and music, in order to stimulate children’s mental ability and creativity. This is due to the fact that much importance has been given to pupils predilections. For instance, research conducted by the American Education Society has shown that students have improved their mathematical skills after taking one year of theatre classes. Therefore, to study theatre has been considered an important innovation.
Secondly, even if new curricula have shown their importance in enhancing student’s talent, it must not be forgotten that traditional lessons put the basis for an appropriate and comprehensive training. This is because traditional modules have built their focus on philosophical thinking development as well as the knowledge of human history. Hence, students are still required to learn about classic curricula in order to have a good understanding of life. For example, research conducted by Harvard University has shown that while the use of theatre classes can improve student’s mathematical skills, following History lessons could develop a deeper human rights consciousness.
To conclude, positive consequences can be derived from the use of original programmes such as theatre and music, yet it should not be forgotten that the traditional path could be important as well as innovations.
ACADEMIC TASK 1
Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie graph shows expenses from tree different regions in the UK for 2014.
In 2014, Yorkshire, Derbyshire and Lancashire have invested in different sectors. It can clearly be seen that the main percentage of expenditures was in Yorkshire and Lancashire with almost a third of their efforts in Education, whereas Derbyshire spent in it approximately a quarter. On the contrary, Derbyshire put the majority of its money in the Leisure sector. Another interesting data is related to Social Services, which is the lower investment in Derbyshire. Small investments were assigned to Environment, which is considered less important when confronted to other sectors, especially in Yorkshire. Community Care has the same expenditures in Yorkshire and Derbyshire, while is less considered in Lancashire.

Overall, each Region seems to have a tendency to one predominant sector, with Yorkshire and Lancashire with a preference for Education, and Derbyshire with a preference for Leisure.

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Francesca-IELTS-T2-Genius!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Traditional schooling is out of date, boring and stifles a child’s natural talents, various professionals have pushed for an education revolution. Are there alternatives in the education system? Is traditional education doing more harm than good?

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The issue of whether traditional programme or teaching revolution benefits children’s talent is a question raised in recent years. This essay will illustrate different aspects of education, using examples from the school sector to support arguments.
Firstly, there is ample evidence to suggest that modern classes can be productive for different aspects. Nowadays, educators have introduced new courses such as theatre and music, in order to stimulate children’s mental ability and creativity. This is due to the fact that much importance has been given to pupils predilections. For instance, research conducted by the American Education Society has shown that students have improved their mathematical skills after taking one year of theatre classes. Therefore, to study theatre has been considered an important innovation.
Secondly, even if new curricula have shown their importance in enhancing student’s talent, it must not be forgotten that traditional lessons put the basis for an appropriate and comprehensive training. This is because traditional modules have built their focus on philosophical thinking development as well as the knowledge of human history. Hence, students are still required to learn about classic curricula in order to have a good understanding of life. For example, research conducted by Harvard University has shown that while the use of theatre classes can improve student’s mathematical skills, following History lessons could develop a deeper human rights consciousness.
To conclude, positive consequences can be derived from the use of original programmes such as theatre and music, yet it should not be forgotten that the traditional path could be important as well as innovations.
ACADEMIC TASK 1
Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie graph shows expenses from tree different regions in the UK for 2014.
In 2014, Yorkshire, Derbyshire and Lancashire have invested in different sectors. It can clearly be seen that the main percentage of expenditures was in Yorkshire and Lancashire with almost a third of their efforts in Education, whereas Derbyshire spent in it approximately a quarter. On the contrary, Derbyshire put the majority of its money in the Leisure sector. Another interesting data is related to Social Services, which is the lower investment in Derbyshire. Small investments were assigned to Environment, which is considered less important when confronted to other sectors, especially in Yorkshire. Community Care has the same expenditures in Yorkshire and Derbyshire, while is less considered in Lancashire.

Overall, each Region seems to have a tendency to one predominant sector, with Yorkshire and Lancashire with a preference for Education, and Derbyshire with a preference for Leisure.

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Francesca-IELTS-T2-Genius!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Traditional schooling is out of date, boring and stifles a child’s natural talents, various professionals have pushed for an education revolution. Are there alternatives in the education system? Is traditional education doing more harm than good?

Words: 258

The issue of whether traditional programme or teaching revolution benefits children’s talent is a question raised in recent years. This essay will illustrate different aspects of education, using examples from the school sector to support arguments.
Firstly, there is ample evidence to suggest that modern classes can be productive for different aspects. Nowadays, educators have introduced new courses such as theatre and music, in order to stimulate children’s mental ability and creativity. This is due to the fact that much importance has been given to pupils predilections. For instance, research conducted by the American Education Society has shown that students have improved their mathematical skills after taking one year of theatre classes. Therefore, to study theatre has been considered an important innovation.
Secondly, even if new curricula have shown their importance in enhancing student’s talent, it must not be forgotten that traditional lessons put the basis for an appropriate and comprehensive training. This is because traditional modules have built their focus on philosophical thinking development as well as the knowledge of human history. Hence, students are still required to learn about classic curricula in order to have a good understanding of life. For example, research conducted by Harvard University has shown that while the use of theatre classes can improve student’s mathematical skills, following History lessons could develop a deeper human rights consciousness.
To conclude, positive consequences can be derived from the use of original programmes such as theatre and music, yet it should not be forgotten that the traditional path could be important as well as innovations.
ACADEMIC TASK 1
Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie graph shows expenses from tree different regions in the UK for 2014.
In 2014, Yorkshire, Derbyshire and Lancashire have invested in different sectors. It can clearly be seen that the main percentage of expenditures was in Yorkshire and Lancashire with almost a third of their efforts in Education, whereas Derbyshire spent in it approximately a quarter. On the contrary, Derbyshire put the majority of its money in the Leisure sector. Another interesting data is related to Social Services, which is the lower investment in Derbyshire. Small investments were assigned to Environment, which is considered less important when confronted to other sectors, especially in Yorkshire. Community Care has the same expenditures in Yorkshire and Derbyshire, while is less considered in Lancashire.

Overall, each Region seems to have a tendency to one predominant sector, with Yorkshire and Lancashire with a preference for Education, and Derbyshire with a preference for Leisure.

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IELTS TASK 1 Inflation-Rates

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection The line graph plots inflation rate in Austria between 2010 and 2015.
In 2010 inflation rate was at 1.60 percent after which it rose steeply to reach its maximum (3.54%) in the consecutive year. After the peak in 2011 the rate followed a downward trend to see its lowest at 1.23 % in 2015. Inflation rate first plummeted to 2.53 percent in 2012 and then continued to fall gradually by around 0.40 % to the end of the period.
The difference between the highest (3.54%) and the lowest point (1.23%) on the graph is roughly a 3-fold in percent. The fastest growth was in the first year when the rate roughly doubled after which it began its return to the starting point value but only to reach it after 4 years and to finish even lower in 2015.
Overall, despite wild fluctuations in the inflation rate throughout the period the rate in the end stayed almost the same as it was in the beginning.

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Adoption rates Academic Task 1

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection The bar graph shows intercountry adoption rates for eight different countries in 2014.
The graph lists rates from the highest to the lowest, left to right. China was undoubtedly the country with the highest adoption rate at 2040. Ethiopia with roughly three times lower rate at 716 was the second highest. All the other selected countries had adoption rates below 600.
All listed countries except for Ethiopia combined had almost the same adoption rate as China (2.040). Ukraine and Haiti had both adoption rate around 500, South Korea followed by approximately one hundred points lower rate, while Congo, India and Uganda had all considerably lower adoption rates, 230, 221 and 201, respectively. The lowest adoption rate on the chart (Congo-201) was the ten times lower rate than the highest from China.
Overall, it is clear that there were significant differences in the 8 selected countries concerning adoption rates with 10- fold range between the highest and the lowest.

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Jane-Good-essay!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience.

Education is the only important thing for children and therefore, they should be encouraged to do nothing but educational activities. In my opinion, outside-school activities are equally important and beneficial as study to young students.

Children would require many other skills in addition to intellectual ones. This could be achieved through activities such as sports, games and spending considerable amount of time with their peers. Participating in team sports, for example, children can learn the skills of cooperation and getting on with others, and since winning and losing in a sport are so commonly experienced that children would be trained enough to develop adequate social skills. Seen in this light, acquiring many sets of skills in both social and academic is crucial for a young child and should be equally worth of spending time to do.

Parents might be correct of seeing the educational contribution is the only factor matters to a child’s development, since good career path sets on high academic achievements, be that as it may, excessive study time can dampen students’ learning initiative. This is because human brain, especially for kids, is designed to function in a balanced fashion, and long and arduous hours spent on doing one particular thing can cause concentration problem. For instance, many parents may be seen complaining about the weariness of study of their children’s. Therefore, spending sometime to play can facilitate children’s learning process.

Overall, I believe that children involved in leisure activities in addition to their daily study routines are benefited more than those who are constantly soaking in school books.

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Snehal-IELTS-STAR-T1!!!

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The bar chart shows the British men’s total intake in different age groups from four various food sources namely dairy, meat, pulses and vegetables.
In age group of 0-24, highest percentage of dairy products are eaten which constitutes to just over 40%. Meat and vegetables intake is half of it. Pulses being a least source of intake which makes up to just less than 20%.
Meat is most popular in mid age (25-49) compared to other sources of dairy, pulses and vegetables which accounts to approximately 25%, 10% and 15% respectively. The intake of vegetables are only 10%, which is lowest of all sources during last life periods of over 50. Pulses are over six times more popular than vegetables, being a maximum source of intake. There is a difference of 5% in dairy and meat intake.
Overall, vegetables are not popular in any life periods, whereas every age group has its own choice of preference to eat.

Essay – Copyright law

Copyright law protects the original work of the creators. I believe, amendment of such laws in society is crucial, because some people want to make easy buck off another person’s labour. This essay will discuss that the patent laws help in development of pirated free environment by using examples of creative incentive and patent infringement to demonstrate and support arguments.
Firstly, copyright is the federal law which promotes artistic expressions by giving authors exclusive rights for a limited period of time. This is largely because it protects almost any medium of creative work, including literature, music, drama, sculptures, graphics, sound recordings and architectural works. For example, a copyright holder in America gets up to 95 years of protection, which provides incentive for the owners to create. Therefore, a creator can make a great profit, along with making sequels of the first product.
Secondly, the copyright law allows society to benefit from new ideas and information. Also, the authority of sells, advertisement in in total favour of the owner. This is due to the fact that the patent laws does not allow to copy the original work. Moreover, it decreases redundancy leading to more productive work. For instance, the charge for copyright infringement in U.S.A. is up to $30,000 or more. As a consequence, the authenticity of the real work is secured under the section of this law.
To conclude, I believe that the copyright law must exist for the smooth and systematic functioning of the society. Perhaps, this law is not only going to create the legendary work by great artists but also to motivate amateurs.

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Snehal-IELTS-STAR-T1!!!

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The bar chart shows the British men’s total intake in different age groups from four various food sources namely dairy, meat, pulses and vegetables.
In age group of 0-24, highest percentage of dairy products are eaten which constitutes to just over 40%. Meat and vegetables intake is half of it. Pulses being a least source of intake which makes up to just less than 20%.
Meat is most popular in mid age (25-49) compared to other sources of dairy, pulses and vegetables which accounts to approximately 25%, 10% and 15% respectively. The intake of vegetables are only 10%, which is lowest of all sources during last life periods of over 50. Pulses are over six times more popular than vegetables, being a maximum source of intake. There is a difference of 5% in dairy and meat intake.
Overall, vegetables are not popular in any life periods, whereas every age group has its own choice of preference to eat.

Essay – Copyright law

Copyright law protects the original work of the creators. I believe, amendment of such laws in society is crucial, because some people want to make easy buck off another person’s labour. This essay will discuss that the patent laws help in development of pirated free environment by using examples of creative incentive and patent infringement to demonstrate and support arguments.
Firstly, copyright is the federal law which promotes artistic expressions by giving authors exclusive rights for a limited period of time. This is largely because it protects almost any medium of creative work, including literature, music, drama, sculptures, graphics, sound recordings and architectural works. For example, a copyright holder in America gets up to 95 years of protection, which provides incentive for the owners to create. Therefore, a creator can make a great profit, along with making sequels of the first product.
Secondly, the copyright law allows society to benefit from new ideas and information. Also, the authority of sells, advertisement in in total favour of the owner. This is due to the fact that the patent laws does not allow to copy the original work. Moreover, it decreases redundancy leading to more productive work. For instance, the charge for copyright infringement in U.S.A. is up to $30,000 or more. As a consequence, the authenticity of the real work is secured under the section of this law.
To conclude, I believe that the copyright law must exist for the smooth and systematic functioning of the society. Perhaps, this law is not only going to create the legendary work by great artists but also to motivate amateurs.

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Bobby-IELTS-STAR!!!!!!!!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection With the rising importance of language skills and the different language tests,people have opined that reading comprehension is eased by improving vocabulary while there are others who contend productive skills like writing and speaking to be of more importance . This essay discusses both arguments and state that it is important to develop skills of reading , writing , speaking and listening as well.
On the one hand,understanding a passage is aided by quickly grasping the meaning and nuances of the words used in the text.This is to say that one needs to have a wide range of vocabulary in order to understand written content.For instance,a student finds it easy to understand a reading passage of the IELTS test if he knows the words used in the script .Thus,it seems important to acquire a wide range of vocabulary in order to improve reading skills.
On the other hand , skills that aid in expressing thoughts, such as speaking and writing , are considered by some to be of greater importance .It is believed so for the reason that these skills have made it possible for knowledge to be passed from generation to generation. If not for these abilities , human race would remain barbaric and unchanged.Due to the lack of co-ordination caused by the inability to express views,man would not have achieved the developments seen now.Thus,it is clear how important productive skills are.

To conclude , given the importance of skills like reading , writing and speaking , I perceive that it is important to acquire all the above mentioned skills along with listening skill in order to complete the loop of communication .

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UZUN-IELTS-STAR

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Vocabulary is the quite significant for language. The people have different notions about learning Vocabulary ; A common opinion is that reading is more efficent for acquiring vocabulary than other skills, another opinion is that writting and speaking have more advantages for learning words. This essay will discuss both views.

Advocated of the idea of reading have better impact learning vocabulay that is supported by stayed in concentrate. When people read a book , they just concentrate to book. Moreover, they just look pages that is why nothing can be barier to concentrate. Learning words are quite simple with concentrate. While reading process, they also consider to purpose of sentece. These situations help to keep in mind word easily with concentrate. Unlike productive skills, words is likely to stay in their mind completly therefore it is hard to concentrate words with writting and speaking .A case in point that A physchology study about process of learning vocabulary shows that most people need concentrate to acquire words , this situation come true with reading skills.

On the other hand, Writting and speaking are command by people’s brain. Furthermore, when people write words or speak with words, people’s brain will be active to learn any words. In addition, writting skill reflect visual memory for people and this provides learning words with ease. Therefore productive abilities are more significant than reading because brain command and active-brain which arguments are indispensible for learning vocabulary. For instance, I have been interesting to learn words since 2002. Most of words that I know ,I have learned with writting exercises and speaking.

When everything is taken into consideration, I strongly believe that productive skills should be accounted for acquiring words. People need to use active brain ,one way to explain this situation that they should write or talk what words they want to learn.

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UZUN-IELTS-STAR

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Vocabulary is the quite significant for language. The people have different notions about learning Vocabulary ; A common opinion is that reading is more efficent for acquiring vocabulary than other skills, another opinion is that writting and speaking have more advantages for learning words. This essay will discuss both views.

Advocated of the idea of reading have better impact learning vocabulay that is supported by stayed in concentrate. When people read a book , they just concentrate to book. Moreover, they just look pages that is why nothing can be barier to concentrate. Learning words are quite simple with concentrate. While reading process, they also consider to purpose of sentece. These situations help to keep in mind word easily with concentrate. Unlike productive skills, words is likely to stay in their mind completly therefore it is hard to concentrate words with writting and speaking .A case in point that A physchology study about process of learning vocabulary shows that most people need concentrate to acquire words , this situation come true with reading skills.

On the other hand, Writting and speaking are command by people’s brain. Furthermore, when people write words or speak with words, people’s brain will be active to learn any words. In addition, writting skill reflect visual memory for people and this provides learning words with ease. Therefore productive abilities are more significant than reading because brain command and active-brain which arguments are indispensible for learning vocabulary. For instance, I have been interesting to learn words since 2002. Most of words that I know ,I have learned with writting exercises and speaking.

When everything is taken into consideration, I strongly believe that productive skills should be accounted for acquiring words. People need to use active brain ,one way to explain this situation that they should write or talk what words they want to learn.

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UZUN-IELTS-STAR

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Vocabulary is the quite significant for language. The people have different notions about learning Vocabulary ; A common opinion is that reading is more efficent for acquiring vocabulary than other skills, another opinion is that writting and speaking have more advantages for learning words. This essay will discuss both views.

Advocated of the idea of reading have better impact learning vocabulay that is supported by stayed in concentrate. When people read a book , they just concentrate to book. Moreover, they just look pages that is why nothing can be barier to concentrate. Learning words are quite simple with concentrate. While reading process, they also consider to purpose of sentece. These situations help to keep in mind word easily with concentrate. Unlike productive skills, words is likely to stay in their mind completly therefore it is hard to concentrate words with writting and speaking .A case in point that A physchology study about process of learning vocabulary shows that most people need concentrate to acquire words , this situation come true with reading skills.

On the other hand, Writting and speaking are command by people’s brain. Furthermore, when people write words or speak with words, people’s brain will be active to learn any words. In addition, writting skill reflect visual memory for people and this provides learning words with ease. Therefore productive abilities are more significant than reading because brain command and active-brain which arguments are indispensible for learning vocabulary. For instance, I have been interesting to learn words since 2002. Most of words that I know ,I have learned with writting exercises and speaking.

When everything is taken into consideration, I strongly believe that productive skills should be accounted for acquiring words. People need to use active brain ,one way to explain this situation that they should write or talk what words they want to learn.

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UZUN-IELTS-STAR

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Vocabulary is the quite significant for language. The people have different notions about learning Vocabulary ; A common opinion is that reading is more efficent for acquiring vocabulary than other skills, another opinion is that writting and speaking have more advantages for learning words. This essay will discuss both views.

Advocated of the idea of reading have better impact learning vocabulay that is supported by stayed in concentrate. When people read a book , they just concentrate to book. Moreover, they just look pages that is why nothing can be barier to concentrate. Learning words are quite simple with concentrate. While reading process, they also consider to purpose of sentece. These situations help to keep in mind word easily with concentrate. Unlike productive skills, words is likely to stay in their mind completly therefore it is hard to concentrate words with writting and speaking .A case in point that A physchology study about process of learning vocabulary shows that most people need concentrate to acquire words , this situation come true with reading skills.

On the other hand, Writting and speaking are command by people’s brain. Furthermore, when people write words or speak with words, people’s brain will be active to learn any words. In addition, writting skill reflect visual memory for people and this provides learning words with ease. Therefore productive abilities are more significant than reading because brain command and active-brain which arguments are indispensible for learning vocabulary. For instance, I have been interesting to learn words since 2002. Most of words that I know ,I have learned with writting exercises and speaking.

When everything is taken into consideration, I strongly believe that productive skills should be accounted for acquiring words. People need to use active brain ,one way to explain this situation that they should write or talk what words they want to learn.

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EISA-T2-STAR-Great-work!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection 5-Traditional schooling is out of date, boring and stifles a child’s natural talents, various professionals have pushed for an education revolution. Are there alternatives in the education system? Is traditional education doing more harm than good?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The issues of education system in the globe have become extremely important due to the innovation of teaching and learning methods. Despite all the world has traditional schooling system, also the modernization of the education system is vital. This essay will discuss both issues, using examples of private tuition from the UK and the education system in South Africa to demonstrate points and improve the argument.
Firstly, although, most of the developed countries depended on traditional education systems, alternative methods exist such as private teaching at home or small groups at institutions. This is due to the fact that some students are unable to cope with the teaching methods in school and often struggle to understand the context based learning. For example, recent studies from a UK education panel have shown that 75 per cent of students who are taking private tuition at home performed excellent in exams compared to pupils only attending classes in school. Therefore, modernization method of education is an appropriate option to promote the performance of the students.
Secondly, traditional method of education system has a negative impacts on students. This is because that classical approach urged all students to be learned in the same boring environment and those not learning quickly tended to fail. For instance, a study from ministry of education in South Africa shows that seven out of ten undergraduate students in old fashioned universities dropped out of their course in comparison with other modern learning methods. As consequence, the impact of traditional ways of teaching is harmful to who are seeking for higher qualifications.
To conclude, although many countries have adopted traditional method of schooling, it is not the best approach to improve students’ performance.

Academic Task 1
The three pie charts compare the distribution of spending money on three areas in the UK in 2014.
Generally, the three regions spent most on education, Yorkshire, Lancashire, and Derbyshire respectively. It can be clearly seen that Derbyshire spent approximately 40 per cent of the money on environment, while Yorkshire and Lancashire spent 35%.
Like Yorkshire, Lancashire spent about 10% on social service, but Derbyshire had the minimum expenditure on it. The three region spent the same proportion on environment. Moreover, also are spent the same amount on other. Regarding the leisure, Yorkshire and Lancashire spent about 30% while Derbyshire spent 40%.
Overall, each region has a favorite section to spend the money on it. According to the three pie chart Yorkshire, Lancashire spent a lot on education, and Lancashire spent most on leisure. Interestingly, the three area spent the same amount on education. The minimum expenditure on social service has seen by Derbyshire.

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Fatemah-GREAT-START!!!!!!!!!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Communication is less between family members of late. Do you agree or disagree?
To what extent do you agree?
Nowadays, families have less contact with each other’s. This essay totally agrees with this statement because of revaluation technology and the hours of work. This essay will discuss this phenomenon and use examples from a recent study and a report from Melbourne university.
Firstly, modern technology effect on the way of communication especially between family members. This is because of the replacement of normal conversations with hypothetical contact. people prefer to spend their time chatting with friends who have never met them than stay with their families. For example, a recent study is proven that young people became antisocial and isolated due to addiction to using technology devices. Therefore, using the technology could Couse damage to people, relationships and brains.
Secondly, parents who work long hours can also have a negative impact on communicating with the family members. This is due to the fact that parents who are under pressure from their job and life demands, are usually exhausted and reluctant to discuss with their children, which often leads to lack of conversations among them and family problems . For instance, it has been reported by Melbourne University that the lack of contact between parents and their children resulted in increase the level of youth crime with 24%. Consequently, although work is necessary to survive, family is much more important. the
To conclude, the new technology and job demands have a tremendous impact on the family relationship so, it highly recommended that Family allocate specific time every day to talk together. Therefore, the issue can be solved.

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and imagination than reading. Do you agree or di agree???

It is argued that children can gain better skills with activity that make them more enjoyable than reading. This essay totally agrees with this statement because I believe that interest activities can develop children`s proficiency and the competition among young people.
Firstly, playing on game console is more benefit than traditional activity such read books. This is because playing is more much interesting and children feel excitement, which leads to learn and develop their skills throughout the enjoyable time. For example, it has been reported by the Sunday news that, a child who spent time in an interest game is more likely to acquisition new skills 33% more than others who just learning through the curriculum. Therefore, technology games such PlayStation is a powerful tool to engage children and teach them in a new way.
Secondly, many people enjoy sport activities such as tennis, swimming and football, this is due the fact that people love the competition and being the best, so children love doing this activity to being winner and achieving their goals. This kind of activities has a numerous positive aspect such as improve their physical abilities. Take Brazilin children for instance they are very talented in playing soccer because they are fascinating and love this sport which make them the best in the whole wide world. Consequently, sports are the positive way to enhance young people productivity and their cognitive abilities.

In conclusion, there is a variety way of acquiring skills with enjoyment time like technology games and sport and sports activity than reading.
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Maria-F-Doing-Good!!!!!!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection ACADEMIC TASK 1
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Words: 150

The bargraph shows the changes in diet and calories of UK males in tree distinct age groups, referring to different sources and four food groups.
Analysed groups are aged 0-24, 25-49 and over 50. It is possible to observe a predominant consumption of dairy products in the 0-24 group, which reached over 40%, while the other food sources are less preferred in the same group, with a proportion of 18 and 20% for each.
Whereas, the 25-49 group shows an increase of preference for meat around 50%, the consumption of pulses in the over 50 group was the higher figure on the chart, which is around 65%. On the contrary, vegetables were not the favoured of any age groups.

Overall, each group has a tendency to one predominant source; meat and dairy were the most consumed between the young groups, with pulses as preferred option for the over 50 group.

Words: 150

The bar graph shows the changes in expected city visits for 2018.
Analysed groups are USA, Canada and Mexico. Cities of destination are London, Paris, Madrid and Istanbul. Whereas, Paris and London will be the most preferred destinations with a presence of USA visitors around 100% and 80% respectively, the same cities seem to be the not the favoured from Mexico visitors which will prefer Madrid as best destination around 65%.
Also, Madrid will be less favourite by the Canada group with a percentage around 30%. On the contrary, Istanbul seems to be the most interesting city for Canadians with a rate around 70%. It is also possible to observe that London and Istanbul will have the lower percentage of visitors from Mexico, with a 20% each.

Overall, each group seems to have a tendency to one predominant source, with Paris, Istanbul and Madrid as most visited city for each group.

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Maria-F-Doing-Good!!!!!!

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection ACADEMIC TASK 1
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Words: 150

The bargraph shows the changes in diet and calories of UK males in tree distinct age groups, referring to different sources and four food groups.
Analysed groups are aged 0-24, 25-49 and over 50. It is possible to observe a predominant consumption of dairy products in the 0-24 group, which reached over 40%, while the other food sources are less preferred in the same group, with a proportion of 18 and 20% for each.
Whereas, the 25-49 group shows an increase of preference for meat around 50%, the consumption of pulses in the over 50 group was the higher figure on the chart, which is around 65%. On the contrary, vegetables were not the favoured of any age groups.

Overall, each group has a tendency to one predominant source; meat and dairy were the most consumed between the young groups, with pulses as preferred option for the over 50 group.

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The bar graph shows the changes in expected city visits for 2018.
Analysed groups are USA, Canada and Mexico. Cities of destination are London, Paris, Madrid and Istanbul. Whereas, Paris and London will be the most preferred destinations with a presence of USA visitors around 100% and 80% respectively, the same cities seem to be the not the favoured from Mexico visitors which will prefer Madrid as best destination around 65%.
Also, Madrid will be less favourite by the Canada group with a percentage around 30%. On the contrary, Istanbul seems to be the most interesting city for Canadians with a rate around 70%. It is also possible to observe that London and Istanbul will have the lower percentage of visitors from Mexico, with a 20% each.

Overall, each group seems to have a tendency to one predominant source, with Paris, Istanbul and Madrid as most visited city for each group.

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IELTS ACADEMIC TASK 1 ANSWERS PLAYSTATION

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection The line graph shows Playstation3 annual sales in millions USD between 2007 and 2012.
In 2007 Playstation3 annual sales were at 3,61m USD, which was the lowest point on the chart. From that point sales gradually rose to reach 9.24m in 2008 and 12.85m in 2009. In the next 4 years sales mildly fluctuated and finished at 13,9m in 2012.
From the starting point sales went up by around three times in 2008 and then again three times through 2009. Just in 2010 sales have dropped slightly from 12,8 to 13m, before reaching its maximum number on the chart, 14,3m USD in 2011. Finally, playstation3 annual sales finished in 2012 with broadly 4 times more (13,9m) than in 2007 (3,61).
Overall, it is clear from the graph that playstation3 annual sales increased considerably in the first two years and through the end of the period remained stable following a modest upward trend.

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IELTS ACADEMIC TASK 1 ANSWERS

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection The graph shows illicit drug user statistics in 2012 . Ecstasy, marijuana, LSD, heroin, methamphetamine,cocaine and crack were illegaly consummated drugs.
Marijuana users stood out among the others at 32m. Each of the other consumated drugs had below 10m users. 3,8m of them consumated cocaine and 2,6m ecstasy. There were almost the same number of methamphetamine and LSD users, at 1,2 and 1,1m, respectively. The least number of users, under 1m, consumated crack at 921 thousand and heroin at 669 thousand.
There were three times more marijuana users than all the others put together. Cocaine users at 3,8m followed in second and ecstasy users with around 1m less users were in third place. The rest of the listed drugs had all 3 times less consumers than cocaine.
Overall, it is clear that marijuana was used illegally by the highest number of users, while heroin had the least number of illicit users.

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IELTS ACADEMIC TASK 1 ANSWERS

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection The graph shows illicit drug user statistics in 2012 . Ecstasy, marijuana, LSD, heroin, methamphetamine,cocaine and crack were illegaly consummated drugs.
Marijuana users stood out among the others at 32m. Each of the other consumated drugs had below 10m users. 3,8m of them consumated cocaine and 2,6m ecstasy. There were almost the same number of methamphetamine and LSD users, at 1,2 and 1,1m, respectively. The least number of users, under 1m, consumated crack at 921 thousand and heroin at 669 thousand.
There were three times more marijuana users than all the others put together. Cocaine users at 3,8m followed in second and ecstasy users with around 1m less users were in third place. The rest of the listed drugs had all 3 times less consumers than cocaine.
Overall, it is clear that marijuana was used illegally by the highest number of users, while heroin had the least number of illicit users.

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IELTS ACADEMIC TASK 1 ANSWERS

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection The graph shows illicit drug user statistics in 2012 . Ecstasy, marijuana, LSD, heroin, methamphetamine,cocaine and crack were illegaly consummated drugs.
Marijuana users stood out among the others at 32m. Each of the other consumated drugs had below 10m users. 3,8m of them consumated cocaine and 2,6m ecstasy. There were almost the same number of methamphetamine and LSD users, at 1,2 and 1,1m, respectively. The least number of users, under 1m, consumated crack at 921 thousand and heroin at 669 thousand.
There were three times more marijuana users than all the others put together. Cocaine users at 3,8m followed in second and ecstasy users with around 1m less users were in third place. The rest of the listed drugs had all 3 times less consumers than cocaine.
Overall, it is clear that marijuana was used illegally by the highest number of users, while heroin had the least number of illicit users.

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SNEHAL-GREAT-START

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection The natural talents of children are devised well when their mind set is free. I believe, joyful tasks can work best for all round development of young minds. This essay will discuss both sides using examples from sports and creative activities to demonstrate points and support argument.
Firstly, scholarly people often believe that reading enhances intelligence, this is clearly not the case, and this is largely because indoor or outdoor games have contributed to systemic and strategic planning. As this is not only going to build their problem solving skills but also to gain appropriate management capacity to confront massive hurdles. For example, recent studies in Howard University indicates that children engaged in playing chess develop more IQ than just reading population. Moreover, badminton improves gross motor skills, hand-eye coordination. Therefore, these physical activities are essential for boosting psychomotor skills and even social attributes.
Secondly, imaginative abilities are born while accomplishment of newer tasks. This is due to the fact that children’s mind are full of enthusiasm, imaginative power and extra boost of invention. So, crafting, painting, drawing will be executed excellently when fresh ideas are implemented. For instance, renowned painter Mr.
M.F.Hussain always creates exquisite paintings, which are popular worldwide. As a consequence, creative tasks are vital in developing cognitive domain and brain storming.
To conclude, from the examples and argument given I believe that, reading should not be the only option for children instead they should be taught that ‘sky is the limit’. And to promote dynamism to their future, enjoyable activities will definately play an important role.

Essay 2- Communication
Communication is the two way process, wherein due to the cooperation of both the sides interaction occurs. I believe that now-a-days families spend less time communicating to each other. This issue has grown significantly due to inception of technology in modern society. This essay will discuss that the interaction between family members have decreased compared to the past, using an example of media and work schedule to demonstrate and support arguments.
Firstly, technology has invented numerous apps for communication. World has come closer, which is just away from a click of a button, it is ironical, this is largely because the real time communication is lost by the usage of electronic gadgets and unlimited internet. For example, smart phones constitutes Facebook, messenger, WhatsApp, all these gives a virtual experience of communication, as various emoticons are used to express emotions. Therefore, instead of a blessing the communication media has become a curse to human being.
Secondly, in this rat race everyone wants to be a winner. This is due to the fact that parents are working long hours in offices. For instance, a survey done in multinational companies indicated that seven out of ten employees unable to spend time with family due to busy office schedules. As a consequence, family members show busy signal to one another by being occupied with work.
To conclude, I believe that the process of communication has stagnated to certain extent from past. It is said that ‘time is a great healer’, so investing real interactive time with loved ones, will surely make a difference to live life worthy.

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