IELTS-CORRECTION-JIGYASU

Essay Corrections available at http://www.ieltswritingtask.net/ https://www.facebook.com/IeltsWritingTask-205577652822039/ https://www.youtube.com/c/ieltsessaycorrection Should humans adapt to technology or should technology adapt to us? Is technology making us intellectually weaker or more intelligent?
This century, technology is present in every part of the world. I believe, although technology has been making people intellectually weaker, it has a positive impact on us too. This essay will analyze either humans should adapt to technology or technology should adapt to us with examples from the Canada Government and University of Toronto.
Technology enables us to learn new things and avail the opportunity to survive in contemporary era where the competition is tough. This is due to the fact that technology such as the Internet, computers and mobile phones helps us to acquire the knowledge about anything. For example, recent research by CSA which stands for Canada Survey Association shows that Canadians are gaining 90% of their knowledge from usage of internet because it is not unusual for the residents of Canada to use technology more often. Therefore, humans must adapt to technology.
On the other side, technology has disadvantages as it has negative effect on our cognitive skills and creativity. This is because, we are becoming increasingly dependent on technology, and instead OF generating our own ideas, we prefer to find out from internet. For instance, study by University of Toronto indicates that three fourth of the total population of Canada is dependent on technology. Consequently, humans should avoid the consumption of technology.
In conclusion, Technology should be adapted everywhere, however use of it should be limited to some extent. It is predicted that it may affect the employment as most of the work will be done through technology.

The bar graph shows four different cities that are expected to be visited by residents of three countries in 2018.
Firstly, 100,000 Americans will visit Paris, whereas most of the Canadians and Mexicans will visit Istanbul and Madrid, which will be accounted for merely 68,000 and 64,000 respectively in 2018. Moreover, 20,000 Mexicans will prefer to spend their time in Istanbul and London.
Furthermore, London will be visited by 80,000 Americans, while Madrid will be visited by most of Americans and Mexicans. 44,000 Canadians will visit Paris, while 22,000 Mexicans will spend their time in Paris.
Overall, Most of the Americans will spend their time in Paris, whereas few of Americans will be interested to visit Madrid. However, Istanbul will be the visited by most of Canadians. Least of Mexicans will visit London and Istanbul.

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