IELTS-ESSAY-CORRECTION-SWEETY-M

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ACADEMIC TASK 1
Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie charts illustrate the local government expenses by the three region in the United Kingdom namely; Yorkshire, Derbyshire and Lancashire in the year 2014.
Yorkshire spent a little more on education than leisure which was considered the highest among the other categories. Community care and social services had an equal portion at half a quarter, while environment and others got the smallest fraction. On the contrary, Derbyshire invested more on leisure than education having 45% of the share and 25% respectively. Social services had only 2% which was the lowest expenditure of the region. The other sectors such as community care, environment and others were at 12%.
Lancashire, had disbursed almost equal portion on education and leisure. Also, community care, social services, environment and others had the same percentage at about 10.
In summary, it is clear that the disbursement in the district of Yorkshire and Lancashire were more on education and leisure whereas Derbyshire on recreation.

Traditional schooling is out of date, boring and stifles a child’s natural talents, various professionals have pushed for an education revolution. Are there alternatives in the education system? Is traditional education doing more harm than good?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Education is the process of facilitating learning and a tool towards success. There are ongoing concerns of innovating the educational system and a query regarding the impact of traditional learning. This essay, will discuss both issues by giving examples such as home schooling and doctors to demonstrate points and support arguments.
Some experts think that there are alternative to learning process and proposed for innovating educational system. For instance, homeschooling is now implemented worldwide to obtain academic excellence. A recent study by National Center for Education Statistics showed a remarkable increase of homeschooled students in the United States of America from 7,000 to 1.1 million who are now studying at home instead of attending to the university. This is for the reason that they can maximize their time between work and study. Thus, having this option could be beneficial to those who have permanent work yet, wanted to obtain a degree.
In similar fashion, traditional type of education also contributes positively than negatively effect to humanity. This is due to the fact that, majority of the professionals finished their degree in the universities or traditional institution of education. For example, doctors in the Philippines takes at least 7 years to finish bachelors’ degree in medicine providing quality education and practice. Therefore, traditional schooling provides a wide range of information that prepares students to be productive beneficial to everyone.
In conclusion, I believe that, both systems are effective as long as the quality of education will not be compromised. It is essential to instill in our minds that, education is the only legacy we can have in this lifetime.

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